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Task 2 · IELTS Writing Task 2 — Universities and workplace skills
Some people believe universities should focus mainly on academic knowledge, while others think they should also teach practical workplace skills. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In many countries, universities are expected to prepare young adults for both further study and employment. Some people argue that higher education should concentrate on academic knowledge, while others believe universities must also teach practical workplace skills. This essay will discuss both perspectives before presenting my own view.
Supporters of an academic focus say that universities exist to build deep subject expertise. Students who study physics, history or economics need time to understand theories, read research and develop critical thinking. For example, medical undergraduates cannot work safely in hospitals unless they first master anatomy, chemistry and clinical reasoning in the classroom. If courses become too vocational, graduates may lack the intellectual foundations required for research, teaching or advanced professional qualifications.
However, employers often complain that new graduates are unprepared for everyday office work. Many companies want recruits who can write clear emails, collaborate in teams and use common digital tools. Universities that offer internships, presentation workshops or project-based modules can help students translate theory into practice. When graduates only memorise abstract concepts, they may struggle in their first job even if their examination marks are strong.
In my opinion, universities should combine academic depth with employability skills rather than choosing one extreme. A balanced curriculum allows specialists to develop expertise while still practising communication and problem-solving in realistic tasks. Engineering faculties, for instance, can keep laboratory research while adding short industry placements. This approach better reflects the needs of modern graduates who must adapt quickly after they leave campus.
In conclusion, although academic knowledge remains essential, universities should not ignore workplace preparation. Teaching both theoretical understanding and practical skills will help graduates contribute to society and meet employer expectations more confidently.
The response addresses both views and states a clear balanced opinion. Paragraphing is clear, but some ideas rely on general statements and predictable linking rather than precise, varied examples.
To move toward Band 6, the essay needs fuller development in each body paragraph, less template language, and more specific support that is paraphrased across the essay.
All parts of the prompt are addressed and the writer's opinion is clear.
Why this did not reach the next band: Ideas are relevant but not consistently extended with specific, well-developed support.
Focused improvement: Add one concrete example per body paragraph that directly supports the topic sentence.
Information is arranged coherently with clear overall progression.
Why this did not reach the next band: Some paragraphs rely on predictable templates and basic transitions.
Vocabulary is sufficient for the task with some effective word choice, but repetition limits precision.
Focused improvement: Paraphrase key nouns across paragraphs (e.g. theoretical study, vocational readiness).
A mix of simple and complex structures is used with generally good control.
Task Response — Original: For example, medical undergraduates cannot work safely in hospitals unless they first master anatomy, chemistry and clinical reasoning in the classroom.
Improved: For instance, medical undergraduates need rigorous anatomy and biochemistry before they can interpret clinical data responsibly during hospital placements.
Immediate skill focus: Task Response — paragraph development with specific examples
Practice task: Rewrite the employer-focused body paragraph using one specific profession and workplace scenario.
IELTS Writing Pathway — Cycle A (around Band 5.5 entry). Focus: Task Response and Lexical Resource. Preview only — not canonical placement.
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